Robotic Teacher

A decade ago, access to technology was limited at schools and ever since, technology has become a part of the society. For a generation of young people, technology, particularly the Internet, is a substantial component in their social and educational lives. Different technologies serve different purposes in the classroom. For example, word, e-mail. Unfortunately nowadays, the computer can even replace teachers.

Many different types of technology can be used in classrooms, everything from video content and digital moviemaking to laptop computing. New uses of technology, such as podcasting, are constantly emerging. In some colleges and universities the students don't even need to actually go there, they only turn on their computer(s), click the mouse and they see their teacher, talking and explaining the material.

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I believe that this kind of education method is wrong because it means that the teachers won't be able to treat each student in personal(מיותר). Moreover, children will probably lose their ability to relate to other human beings. It can also make them become dependent on technology to learn.This will probably cause a disconnected, apathetic, and uncaring youth.

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To sum up, this kind of technology should be taken out of the society. Maybe it is good to use in our free time, or just as a hobby.But replacing teachers beside computers means taking a large risk. A Risk that we can not allowe(sp.), that will make our society disconnected, apathetic, and uncaring.This kind of risk should be denunciated from our society.

Very good work. Well done!

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Daphna

TEENAGERS BEHIND THE WHEEL

How many of you have heard about teenagers involved in car accidents? How many of your friends were involved in car accidents? Motor vehicle accidents remain the leading cause of death in youths from 16 to 20 years of age. The motor vehicle fatality rate of teenagers is higher than that of any other age group.

An organization of accident victims has recently proposed that the age for getting a driver's license should be raised to 19. As I see it, the issue of young drivers is a major problem in society. I think that everyone should take actions to try to stop the accident(s). I also believe that laws like the one I mentioned before can help us prevent this massive epidemic.

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I have read that the two main risk factors(risk factor for what?) include lack of driving experience and risk taking behavior. The law I mentioned before can solve half of the problem. By rising the age for a driver's license to 19 instead of 16 or 17, we can be sure that less car accidents will happen. At the age of 19 the drivers are under less peer-pressure and they are more mature. Moreover, at this age the drivers are more aware of the consequences of their actions. So they know what(מיותר) the price they will have to pay if they will take(gr.) risks on the road.

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To sum up, I do support the proposal of rising the age of getting (a) drivers' license to 19. I believe that the drivers are more mature at this age, and the fact is that maturity can and will probably save lives, especially on the road. I surely hope that this proposal will become a law in the future.

Very good.

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Daphna

The Internet Generation

The internet is one of the most important inventions in our world. It has become a significant part(מיותר) and even inseparable (part) of our lives. In(ww.) the internet we can communicate with our friends, read the news, hear music, and we can even use it to to do our homeworks(מיותר). But in spite all of this, some say that the internet is the biggest mistake of the modern world.

On the one hand, the internet modernized our whole world. Firstly, thanks to the internet we can talk to our friends whenever and how much(ww.) we want. Secondly, it allows us to search for information in varied and unlimited sites and places. Moreover, there are sites, in which you can sell your old things, and other sites, in which you can shop and that way saving(gr.) time.

On the other hand, the internet can be a very dangerous place for the ones who don't know how to act carefully. The worst thing about the internet is that there is no guaranty that no one will brake(sp.) into your privet(sp.) site and discover details about you, which will later be used against you. The internet can be a violent place, where kids use the fact of no privacy(phr. - not clear what you mean) and make fun of other kids. Moreover, because of the internet, kids are reading less books, and doing less exercise, and even skipping doing homeworks(מיותר). This will cause(ww.) an apathetic and inactivate society.

In conclusion, I believe that in spite of all the risks and disadvantages of the internet, it had changed our lives in irreversible way(gr. - irreversibly). It has become a big and significant part of our lives and we probably won't be able to manage without it. However, I do believe that we should take actions to lower the risks and bad influence. Actions like using the internet and his(ww.-its) influence on children to help convince them doing(gr.) more exercise, and open their eyes to a different world.

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Daphna

Working teenagers

(this was taken from last year booklet if all three modules. Unseen number 8.)

All over the world teenagers work in all kind(s) of jobs, cleaning, serving (or) selling, and even selling lemonade in the streets. Teenagers work during school and after school, but what is a better choice? Does it make difference on our studying(phr.), our social life(gr. - lives) or maybe even our maturation(ww. - you mean: maturity)?

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But first, we need to find out what is it (that) really that(מיותר) attracts so many students to work? Maybe it is the benefit of earning money and the ability to do with the money whatever we want, without anyone telling us whether it is alright or not. Or maybe it is the freedom that we feel when we have our own job and act all(ww. - like) grownups all the(ww. - of a) sudden? But whatever it is, everything can be summed up by one word - independence.

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I believe that a job evolve(ww.+gr.) in us all(מיותר) responsibility, maturity and independence,(New sentence) it helps us make the right decisions and gives us a pick(ww.) into the grownups' world, which we will be part of him(מיותר). Will a job duration(ww.) school really help us and show us how to deal and be part of this new and scary grownup world? I don't think so, but I do believe that we will enter the adult world with less fear, more knowledge and definitely a smile on our face. - The last part is not clear.

To sum up, I really believe that a job can help us be more independence(ww.) in our lives. It can also make us more mature and responsible. I believe that everyone who can, and wants to have a job while being a student, should have one.

Not bad.

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Daphna

the qualities of a friend.

We have lots of friend(s) in all different positions of proximity. We have friends just to sit with at schools, we have friends just to hang out (in the) afternoon, and we have friend(s) to talk about everything and which(ww. - whom) we feel safe with. I believe that the most important qualities in a best-friend should be sensitivity, honesty and faithfulness.

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First, a friend should be sensitive. He should try to understand your moods and know how to act and whether you are sad, angry, or tired without you telling him. A sensitive friend wouldn't jump of joy when you are sad. I also believe that another important quality is honesty. Everyone needs to know that their friend won't lie to him, and that he can trust him. A friend should know to tell us the truth no matter what happens and even if he believes it's(ww. - it is) not for the best.

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I think that the most important quality is faithfulness. We need to know that we can trust our friend. We need to know that our friend won't go scatter a secret you (have) just told him. If a friend will tell(gr.) your secrets and betray you for (an)other friend, you know you can't trust him. If you can’t trust him you will not tell him you(r) secrets, or hang with him, you will not be able to talk to him without being afraid that he will embarrass you. And if you can’t trust your friend…what kind of friend is he?

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These qualities, sensitivity, honesty (and) faithfulness, are important to keep us with(phr.) our friends. All these qualities help us and our friends stay friends(phr.). Without these qualities the bonding will be lost and so is our friend(phr.).

Good work.

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Daphna

56 George street,
New-York
29 April, 2010

Columbia university
13 Jersey Street.
New York, NY.


Dear Sir / Madam,

I am writing this letter in response to an article I read about a new course, which is about to be opened in the next month.

I was told all your courses are excellent and I am interesting(gr.) in attending a course of "Medical Care for Animals". I am currently a student at "Understanding the brain of the animals" in the local university. I desire to know more about animals then the thought process of animals(phr.).

I also take courses of(ww. - in) biology and chemistry at the local university and I see many programs on the "National Geographic" channel, so I know a lot about animal diseases and how they can be cured. When I have free time I usually volunteer at veterinarians' clinics or animals societies, so I have experience in taking care of animals.

I would be grateful if you could send me more information about the course "Medical Care for Animals".

Best regards,

Leona Lawis

Very good.
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Daphna

56 Avenue street,
Holon
10 November, 2012

See the World

13 Jersey Street.

New York, NY.

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Dear Sir/Madam,

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My fiancé and I have been planning to go on a(ww. - our) honey-moon to the US for a month. We are interested in going on an organized tour with an English-speaking guide.

We are interested in making this trip unforgettable and full of new adventures. We are the kind of people who like to expand our horizons and learn new things. We would like to see zoos and circuses and special places like the Coronado Island and the Napa valley.

We would like to know the cost of every popular site. Can you give us information about the hotels there and their costs? Should we stay in the best hotels or are the hostels are(מיותר) enough? What kind of transportation should we use? As you see we can(ww. - need) some more information.

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We would be grateful and appreciate any kind of help you can give us. Looking forward for help(ww.), thank you very much(phr.)

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Sincerely yours,

Claire Bennet

Good work.

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Daphna