There has always been a connection between food and behavior. In the article "The Disaster between our ears" the nutritionist Alice Brown says that we all (have) to be more responsible for what we are eat. However, many parents are not aware of this fact.
As a result (This is not the best way to begin a paragraph), parents allow their children to eat too much sugar and caffeine in their meals. For example, my cousin, Eden, From Rosh Ha'Ain becomes hyperactive after eating or drinking sugar or caffeine. (However,) His typical breakfast consists of cereal with lots and lots of sugar.
A suggestion to helping(gr.) the situation would be to educate parents and teach them about the importance of balances(gr.) diets. The media should be used to promote healthy eating skills (Explain - in what way van the media be used?).
As a conclusion, I believe that we all should be more aware of our eating habits. Then we can be more responsible for our behavior. By balancing our meals we can control ourselves and our life(gr. - lives)
Yes, Hofit, everything you've written is correct but you haven't dealt with the issue I presented: What about the food manufacturers? Should they be held responsible? Now, I understand, from your essay, that the answer is no, but you should mention them and the fact that it's not their responsibility.
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Daphna.
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